Task 12. Valeria Kazachenko
What are the advantages and disadvantages of our ever-increasing use of computer technology?
Nowadays, it is obvious to everyone that we live in the digital era. The world is experienced (WF: why passive?)) the major phenomena (WNum) of rapid technical (WW: comp "technological) advances. A lot of new cutting-edge devices are transforming our daily lives and our businesses. Today, each of us can hardly imagine his or her life without a smartphone, a navigation system and the Internet. Can we say with confidence that all these appliances bring us only benefits? Or there are some pitfalls in this issue?
Only thirty years ago, in order to study this or that issue it was necessary to go to the library, look for materials, read a lot of books and make extracts. It took a very long time. Now any dictionary, any book or library is literally in your hand. You can go to the subway, sit with friends in a restaurant or on a bench in the park and you will always be able to get any information that will be useful at one time or another. You have quick and easy access to the information you need. Thus, you save your time. And as you know time is your main resource in the 21st century.
Moreover, gadgets help to quickly make plans and change them. Fast communication is another advantage. The ability to contact the needed person at any time with the help of mobile communication and the Internet has a positive impact on building business and personal relationships.
But if everything can be found on the Internet, then should you learn and remember something? One of the most important problems of the constant use of gadgets follows from this question. The degradation of the human personality. People no longer think about how and where to get new knowledge, learn something new. He or she knows that everything can be found on the Internet if necessary.
Gadgets are the killers of your time. Whether it's necessary or not, you spend a lot of time with them. Social networks, games, series will deprive you of the opportunity to enjoy the world and to exist normally in society.
Both cons and pros turned out to be very significant. From my point of view, everything should be in moderation. Use new technologies wisely and then they will bring only benefit.
Thank you for sharing this information! Nowadays this topic is very important. It was really interesting to read. Your work is well-organized and logical. The arguments are convincing.
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ReplyDeleteyour essay is rather well-developed but you need to add a more specific example in the paragraph which starts with "Moreover..." and "Gadgets are the killers..." because it's not quite common to have paragraphs just 2 lines long. Also, think about a way to make your concluding paragraph more memorable. Do you remember some techniques for conclusions? On the other hand, your your essay draft is logical, which makes it quite easy to read.
I've highlighted the last sentence of the opening paragraph because if it is your thesis statement it cannot be a question. By definition thesis statements must be written as affirmative sentences.
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